Blooregard Q. Kazoo

This story has me confused. In the beginning, the robot is just that, a robot. You make it clear that his responses are programmed in, and thus it's reasonable for ...

Yeah, plenty of authors switch between first person and third person. A rather good example of this is "Enders Game" by Orson Scott Card. I didn't even realize what he ...

"I like fantasy better, but it seems like all the good ideas are taken. " That's your problem right there! Don't worry so much about being original or creative. If ...

Welcome to YWS! Leaning German? I'm learning Latin! They're the same, right? Okay, so maybe not, but we're both learning languages and that's the important part!

Welcome Nathan! I'm Bloo! Okay, so that's not my real name of course. That would be Kyle. So greetings to the site! I found this site back in May, and ...

This from the points pop-up that you'll find if you hit the question mark button in the featured member area of the home page: Points are used to help determine ...

The first thing Joe is that you may find more success with this piece on another venue, such as or critiquecircle.com. You might also try wordtrip.com. While the Young Writers ...

I loved this! You're rhyming structure and humor reminds me very much of a Dr. Seuss story. How you chose to structure your poem works incredibly well. Indeed, none of ...

Hi nothingface and welcome to the site! I'm afraid that I'm pretty much a new member as well, but maybe we can commiserate together? I won't touch on what Fand ...

You're from the U.A.E.? That's awesome! I mean, I've never ever been there, but I've never met anyone from there before. THAT IS SO COOL!! :) The first thing you ...

This is a rather frustrating poem to read. You've told us the speaker is tired emotionally, but never tell us why, and I want to know why! What's wrong? Who ...

Don't read this while listening to Flogging Molly. The two don't fit. Anyhow, your tone remains consistent throughout, and the flow remains uninterrupted. As Fand pointed out, you have a ...

I like the idea of setting a story fifty years after a zombie outbreak. Gives you a chance to go into all the rebuilding still taking place, the scars that ...

I'll sign up too!

Hmmm... for her birthday you say? Her birthday must have sucked. Nice drawing. Cool. Sorry, don't have much to say! I'm a terrible artist so anything with a straight line ...